Her professor droned on, his annoying voice bouncing around in her skull, eating at her nerves. She tried to shut his voice out, and instead focused on his movements. Without his voice, his motions were over enthusiastic, especially for one teaching a class at 9am. She watched him awkwardly swing his arms around, then pick up one of the submitted essays. He began shaking the essay violently to accent his point, two of it’s pages coming unstapled and floating under the desks of the front row. The paper now looked as though it had been stuffed rudely into someone’s backpack before submission.
“I really hope that isn’t my essay,” she thought idly. “He’s going to take off points for the weak staple…”
Writing 2/28
Zoey Delmaire Writes 
More good description, but I think rather than “annoying” you could actually find a word that more vividly describes the professor’s voice. (“Grating,” maybe?) Or you could just cut “annoying” because you already used the verb “droned,” which gives us a pretty good description to begin with. Also you had an “it’s” in there that should have been an “its.” I liked the contrast between the professor’s voice and his actions. (Is this based on a real class…?)
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Thanks! It’s based off my Shakespeare class, lol. Actually wrote it during the class, hence the mistakes. Will fix tonight…
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